雅思寫(xiě)作范文匯總一次成功的復(fù)議

雅思寫(xiě)作范文匯總一次成功的復(fù)議，很多同學(xué)對(duì)于這個(gè)問(wèn)題有疑問(wèn)和不解，那么下面就跟著中國(guó)教育在線(xiàn)的小編詳細(xì)了解一下吧。

本文來(lái)自雅思作文網(wǎng)liuxue86.com《一次成功的復(fù)議》。

我的寫(xiě)作成績(jī)值得復(fù)議嗎?

賴(lài)?yán)蠋?

您好. 我是您108期周末班的龔雪媚. 在您批改的作文中大多得6+, 您對(duì)我的評(píng)語(yǔ)就是英語(yǔ)表達(dá)超6,組織得好就能拿7的那位同學(xué).

我在9月23日參加的考試,寫(xiě)作居然只有5分.那次的大作文寫(xiě)的是"越來(lái)越多的人開(kāi)私家車(chē),說(shuō)說(shuō)優(yōu)點(diǎn)和缺點(diǎn)".我是這樣寫(xiě)的:

優(yōu)點(diǎn):私家車(chē)能繁榮經(jīng)濟(jì), 特別是汽車(chē)工業(yè).

方便, 能隨時(shí)隨地到任何地方,不用象公交車(chē)一樣限定線(xiàn)路和時(shí)間.

舒適, 不用擠公交車(chē).

缺點(diǎn):令道路更堵塞,特別是上下班高峰期.

汽油供應(yīng)短缺,很多私家車(chē)需要排隊(duì)加油(以廣州為例)

造成更多的環(huán)境污染.

結(jié)尾: 認(rèn)為開(kāi)私家車(chē)的缺點(diǎn)大于優(yōu)點(diǎn).

考完出來(lái)自我感覺(jué)良好, 不知是否我這樣寫(xiě)離題了才得個(gè)5分, 還請(qǐng)賴(lài)?yán)蠋熤更c(diǎn).

我這樣寫(xiě)可以拿6分嗎? 我想申請(qǐng)成績(jī)復(fù)議, 值得這樣做嗎?

賴(lài)?yán)蠋熁貜?fù):

yes,i think u'd better go for an application of reevaluating. anyway, i’ll still need to tell u some mistakes u made.

now let me try to simulate how the examiner was looking at your task2 n then drew such a stupid conclusion.

the first idea(advantage) is not based on comparison and contrast----more private cars help boom the car manufacturing industryà not a right idea. but the second one hits the point---convenience. how about the drawbacks? traffic jams caused---hmmmm..good idea. more pollution is created---good too. but queue to fill up tanks with gasoline----hmmmm...u might not express it in a coherent way.

after all, u included one good point for the positive side n one for the negative side. i believe u definitely deserve a chance to get band 6. the examiner probably only read the first bit of the advantages n then turned to briefly examine the last part and hence marked your paper like this. if u apply for reassessing, the entire paper( two tasks) will be scrutinized by another examiner, n the good points will not be missed. this is why i tend to encourage u to have a try.

if unclear, call me .

good luck! Andrew

學(xué)生最后來(lái)郵

I'm glad to tell you that my writing is re-marked as band 6. Thank you very much for the encouragement, otherwise I may lose the confidence to apply the remark.

(由廣州仲愷雅思培訓(xùn)中心賴(lài)勁松老師提供)

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